Do Overs (8 Rewrite Notes for Any Comedy Script)

The Other Network Comedy ContestIn a surprising development, there are no declared winners (yet) for the Other Network Comedy Contest this year (Dec. 2008 deadline).

Like the Nobel committee, the Other Network decided this prize isn't relative and there aren't automatically any winners. In previous years, we saw material we loved and work that was good enough to get showrunners interested in attaching to the projects. This year... not yet. So here's what we're going to do.

We are extending the deadline to Feb. 28, 2009. If you already submitted work, you are welcome to re-write and re-submit your work and we'll reconsider it at no additional cost (please include proof of payment with your updated entry).

If you didn't enter material before you can do it now.

We wish we had time to give individual notes because some of the submitted material was not bad. There were some good premises in some of the original scripts. Some fairly funny sketches. Some competent spec scripts. A few are just a couple of punch-ups away from being very strong. But here's the bottom line: you have to really stand out to have any shot at getting your foot in the door based on your script alone. Especially in the industry-wide shifts that are going on. You're competing against writers with prduced TV credits.

So here are 8 rewrite notes for your comedy script:

1 - Put at least one solid laugh on every page. Not witty banter or zany behavior. A laugh. Not just your opinion, but based on other people’s reads. You are having other people read it, right?

2 - Double-check your story structure and make your act breaks strong to keep an audience interested (and surprised) to the very end.

3 - Make sure every scene has a a comedic high point (character-based) and a dramatic high-point (story beat) that advances the plot, hopefully in a funny turn.

4 - Let your characters have clear distinctive vocabularies and rhythms. Check by reading it out loud. You are reading it out loud, right?

5 - Make sure your characters, at least your leads, have more than one dimension; definable qualities that inform every action the character makes.

6 - Take another hard look at the structure. See if you can’t add a twist, turn or escalation. How many beats to the A story? How many beats to the B story? Is each beat a real step forward? What other fuel can you throw on the fire? A lot of comedy comes from escalation and scale.

7 - Do another serious punch-up draft. Try to add a laugh to every scene.

8 - Do another even more serious punch-up pass. Try to add a laugh to every page. If you have any funny friends, get them to help you. That’s not cheating, it’s what everyone in Hollywood does when they’re writing a pilot.

These notes are based on Contest Committee consensus, including my own personal experience reading hundreds of scripts as a professional reader and head judge of The Other Network Comedy Contest, plus working with dozens of writers as a consultant.

They are specifically based on the surprising results of the contest this year: no winners (yet). New extended deadline is Feb. 28 with free re-entry for rewrites.

If you're serious about comedy, you should really put your ears on The Writers Room, a series of in-depth interviews with top showrunners about the craft and business of comedy.

Please make use of more of our free resources for writers, performers and other creatives at the Un-Cabaret blog and exclusive downloads. And if you're in LA come visit our Un-Cab Lab workshops for a mind-expanding demonstration of the power of the spoken word to supercharge any writing.

We really want your scripts to be good. Give us something to get excited about.

Previous winners have had their work seen by agents at UTA and Metropolitan, managers at Brillstein-Grey, executives at Fox and Comedy Central, producers and award-winning TV creators like:

ALAN ZWEIBEL ("Saturday Night Live", "It's Garry Shandling's Show")
BOB ODENKIRK ("Mr. Show", "Saturday Night Live", "Tenacious D")
JOHN RIGGI ("The Comeback", "30 Rock", "The Larry Sanders Show")
JAY KOGEN ("The Simpsons", "Frasier")
BILL OAKLEY & JOSH WEINSTEIN ("The Simpsons", "The Mullets")
WINNIE HOLZMAN ("Wicked", "Thirtysomething", Creator of "My So-Called Life")
BRYAN FULLER ("Wonderfalls", "Heroes", "Pushing Daisies")
CINDY CHUPACK("Sex and the City", "Everybody Loves Raymond")
BRENT FORRESTER ("The Office", "King of The Hill", "Undeclared")
ROB COHEN ("The Ben Stiller Show", "The Simpsons")
JON KINNALLY ("Ugly Betty", "Will & Grace")

Several winning scripts from past years were recently read by development execs at Starz/Film Roman. The doors keep opening.

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